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[She_Remix [Box-Killa]]

Well done.

In the end you have a very listenable song. You can take that and feel good. However:

The strength of this song relies on the beats. In which there isn't much variety. I mean what I'm basically looking at here is someone else's song sped up with a beat laid over the top. The beats all make that same transition too. ( I haven't really made music in 10 years. But I'd have used sample off-setting or note slide to get that sound. No clue what the right name for it is. ) The beats all transition with an effect not unlike hearing something under a pillow.

The music itself doesn't really feel played with either. Maybe you did, I don't know. Just telling you how it sounds to me the ignorant audience. It seemed to me like the song under the beats was pretty much left alone. Maybe cut it up and move it around. Let some of the notes breathe. Right now it sounds sped up. Find a way to make it feel like it's supposed to be 140bpm.

Please don't take this to mean I think I'm better than you. I usually don't write music reviews. Cause I'm pretty ignorant. I only reviewed because you asked. Hope that this helps.

[Strawberry Clock's Rant]

Dammit I'm posting this anyway

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This is NOT a review of this audio. This is a review of your Ashley Movie that got blammed too quickly for me to submit my review.
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First off all Condolences. I'm sorry for your loss. But...

You ARE exploiting something here. Whether or not you are ignorant of your own exploitation is debatable.

You took a tragedy and used it to ram an issue down your audiences throat. Kinda like the Bush administration rammed 9-11 down our throats.

What did you say to us with this?

Homophobes are bad. Ashley was good. Ashley killed herself.

Why should I give a shit? You told me nothing about why Homophobia was bad. Nothing about why Ashley killed herself, and even less about who EITHER of you are.

This SEEMS like a middle finger to those who persecute YOU under the guise of an attack on those who persecuted your friend. It seems selfish. You and Ashley weren't a couple when it happened. You implied as much. Which seems like you are claiming what might well be undeserved sympathy. A pity party just for you. It seems like you're 15 and you don't know shit.

Now before you can blindly retort. No I don't know how it is to be you. But that's because you didn't tell me.

Now... Why did I bother to reply?
Because I'm on your side. And this kind of thing has the exact opposite effect our side needs. No one pities you. I'm disgusted. The Homophobes use this as self-vindication. And gay rights suffers.

You're right Fuck homophobes. But, now what?

Kyora-Mishiso responds:

Zoink.
Holy shit what's a long review.
Anywho, I'll keep all that in mind next time I resubmit a flash with her in it.
Thankies.