Occluded's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Acid Grandma]

Really well done.

I think this is a great piece. And it seems like a real step forward for you. You might be discouraged by how little attention/feedback you are getting. But keep working. Pump out a couple more of this quality, and you're sure to get front-paged. I 5ed and favorited. On your next piece I would work on a full composition. I mean put your subject in a setting. Don't get me wrong the background here looks good, but it doesn't add to the piece. Keep up the good work.

Jaona responds:

You don't even realize how much your comment meant for me. Thank you! :)
And I will take your advice :D

[Darkness]

Damn

That is fantastic. Love the atmosphere of this piece. Nice work as always.

[no title]

Nice work.

Very lovely piece of work here. If you don't mint a little criticism read on. I'd love to see the piece colored. If you're gonna continue creating art with outlines I'd recomend the book "Hi-Fi Color for Comics" by Brian and Kristy Miller. As a B&W image there are some things that bother me. The grey box. For one everything else is black or white, and so it seems out of place. Also it's got pixel jaggies around the outside. If I knew what program you had used I could talk you through fixing this. Lastly there is a bit below the rose that is a lighter color grey than the rest.

I wouldn't have commented if I didn't think this piece was great. You've obviously got talent. I'd like to see you move toward a more finished piece.

ronniehicks responds:

thanks for the feedback,......and i appreciate the compliment, i finish alot of my work, ( color, etc. ), but am obsessed with outlining,......might be a downfall, but who cares, love what i do,...............................................................

[level 51]

Ouch

Why?!? Now I have to talk nicely to my penis.

I will say it took me a sec to identify the parts. The left arm (the one on the right as we look at it) reads more like a head. You could probably pin that on the forced perspective coupled with the odd alien anatomy. I think this would be hard to fix without adding a background. Maybe a little more atmospheric perspective? Push the right arm (left side as we see it), and the hindquarters back by fading to white. Or you could render the foreground elements sharper and the background elements looser. You know, make them seem in and out of focus respectively.

Anyway. Good stuff as always.

sucho responds:

honestly i liked how confusing this turned out. i will probably get rid of the white later though

[The Great Owl]

Well Done

I think it could be better if you had stayed away from the soft brush more. Right now it's too smooth to look painterly, but not accurate enough to be photoreal. Also I think you need some element that defines the subject in the space. Right now it could be a really huge plane (which I think was your intent) or it could just be close to the 'camera'. Perhaps a small plane, or an artillery 'flare' passing in front of it. But, again, well done.

NCH responds:

yeah, actually i was intending for the paintery effect. never intended it to be really that real. or probably that the picture indeed still have lots of room to detail up and etc, esp the front buildings which are just quick brush swatches.

[Reborn]

Nice work.

I don't understand why this is under a 3 right now. I 5ed. Which only brought it up to a 2.82. C'mon people this is some good stuff here. Show some appreciation.

Anyway, this is an excellent piece of work. Well done.

ThinXIII responds:

Thanks!

[Tankgirl (Line Art)]

FINISH

I'm glad you didn't finish this in time for the contest. Or I would have... I would have... umm... lost. Or, I guess, I lost anyway... so...

You should have finished this!

You should still finish this, actually. Looks great.

[Vitro IV]

Nice response idiot.

... When you're a dick to your one reviewer why the hell would anyone else review your work?

Jesus man he was paying you a compliment.

theafro responds:

I'll be a dick to you too, pallie.

Get off my internet.

[Amiee]

...

I can't wait to find out where this is stolen from. To see his previous theivery look here:

http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/807600/29

[Oz]

Favorited

This piece is wonderful. You should be proud.

Critique: There could be a little finessing done to the left eye ( as we are looking at it ). It seems to me it needs to come closer to the nose and rotated counterclockwise just a touch. I also think the flat outline on the jaw is too thick. It needs more of the rendered part of the face to come through the jaw.

Take my critique with a grain of salt. I tend to work my art until all the life is squeezed out of it. Again you should be proud. This is great.

ghlow responds:

thank you! If I ever work on this thing again, I will definitely take this into consideration.