Occluded's art Reviews on Newgrounds

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Well...

I hate you. I don't know if I mentioned this recently. But I do. This is an excellent piece. Composition is nice. The image is playful and original. The use of color is brave and exciting. My only problem with it is the slightly disturbing evocation the milky fluid brings up for me. But I'm a sicko.

This is so good, and I hate you.

sucho responds:

so i cant come 'round your place to go milkin' again? D:

[Yes?]

Very Nice

I think this has a good chance at frontpage. I think it's successful in a way that only a few of your other pieces are. The composition here is given room to breathe. There's plenty of distinction between elements. And I think with this one you really nailed down a painterly style. I mean it feels thick with 'paint'.

You've made accidents (like as you pointed out one arm being bigger than the other) work. Not to the point where it feels sublime, but it definitely doesn't feel awkward.

I like the fast and loose feel of this too. Because it is really detailed. Somehow you made that contradiction work. Good job man.

Errold responds:

Why why, you were right! :D thanks for the great critizism, I'll make use of it!

[iScribble stuff]

Still pretty badass

For iScribble that's pretty badass dude. You using a tablet with this?

That little blue blobby line bugs me though.

UltraPitchFork responds:

Thanks.

Yes I use a tablet. This piece isnt finished btw but I wanted to submit it anyway. That's why there's a little blue blob that I didnt bother to erase.

[Last Rain]

I think this is the one

I was on the fence about whether this one or 'Father's Golem' was going to get frontpaged. I've decided no matter which one I chose I was gonna be wrong. I think you're a shoe in for one of them to make it. So congrats. You've definitely got the rendering skills. I would like to see you work on composition more. How you're subjects are placed in space. It seems like you're so wrapped up in the main subject that you neglect making that subject dynamic, and putting him in a flushed out setting. But again. Damn fine work.

Mohzart responds:

Thank you very much! And I do agree with not paying more attention to the composition, that's because I'm disorganised and kinda suck at that thing... ;P But I am working on it. Thanks again :D

[Acid Grandma]

Really well done.

I think this is a great piece. And it seems like a real step forward for you. You might be discouraged by how little attention/feedback you are getting. But keep working. Pump out a couple more of this quality, and you're sure to get front-paged. I 5ed and favorited. On your next piece I would work on a full composition. I mean put your subject in a setting. Don't get me wrong the background here looks good, but it doesn't add to the piece. Keep up the good work.

Jaona responds:

You don't even realize how much your comment meant for me. Thank you! :)
And I will take your advice :D

[no title]

Nice work.

Very lovely piece of work here. If you don't mint a little criticism read on. I'd love to see the piece colored. If you're gonna continue creating art with outlines I'd recomend the book "Hi-Fi Color for Comics" by Brian and Kristy Miller. As a B&W image there are some things that bother me. The grey box. For one everything else is black or white, and so it seems out of place. Also it's got pixel jaggies around the outside. If I knew what program you had used I could talk you through fixing this. Lastly there is a bit below the rose that is a lighter color grey than the rest.

I wouldn't have commented if I didn't think this piece was great. You've obviously got talent. I'd like to see you move toward a more finished piece.

ronniehicks responds:

thanks for the feedback,......and i appreciate the compliment, i finish alot of my work, ( color, etc. ), but am obsessed with outlining,......might be a downfall, but who cares, love what i do,...............................................................

[level 51]

Ouch

Why?!? Now I have to talk nicely to my penis.

I will say it took me a sec to identify the parts. The left arm (the one on the right as we look at it) reads more like a head. You could probably pin that on the forced perspective coupled with the odd alien anatomy. I think this would be hard to fix without adding a background. Maybe a little more atmospheric perspective? Push the right arm (left side as we see it), and the hindquarters back by fading to white. Or you could render the foreground elements sharper and the background elements looser. You know, make them seem in and out of focus respectively.

Anyway. Good stuff as always.

sucho responds:

honestly i liked how confusing this turned out. i will probably get rid of the white later though

[The Great Owl]

Well Done

I think it could be better if you had stayed away from the soft brush more. Right now it's too smooth to look painterly, but not accurate enough to be photoreal. Also I think you need some element that defines the subject in the space. Right now it could be a really huge plane (which I think was your intent) or it could just be close to the 'camera'. Perhaps a small plane, or an artillery 'flare' passing in front of it. But, again, well done.

NCH responds:

yeah, actually i was intending for the paintery effect. never intended it to be really that real. or probably that the picture indeed still have lots of room to detail up and etc, esp the front buildings which are just quick brush swatches.

[Reborn]

Nice work.

I don't understand why this is under a 3 right now. I 5ed. Which only brought it up to a 2.82. C'mon people this is some good stuff here. Show some appreciation.

Anyway, this is an excellent piece of work. Well done.

ThinXIII responds:

Thanks!

[Vitro IV]

Nice response idiot.

... When you're a dick to your one reviewer why the hell would anyone else review your work?

Jesus man he was paying you a compliment.

theafro responds:

I'll be a dick to you too, pallie.

Get off my internet.